Dripping

Actually I'm afraid my English is completely rusted up but I guess you won't kill me if I make any stupid mistakes ;)

First I have to say that I usually do not read lemons anymore. I never liked writing them to be true. But after I found out that this was about my favorite pairing I had to take a look and I have not been disappointed ^^

I was sceptical whether or not you were able to keep those two IC because I completely failed to imagine how they would behave in such a situation... then I started reading and there were many little hints who pulled the characters back IC when it started to get a little OoC. I guess Kaido is a little too selfconfident even though they share this relationship for a few months.

But for I liked the ending so much, that was quite alright ;) I'm afraid that this comment won't get as long as the other one you got from me, but this is in english and this is about lemon... it's not so easy to write about it :D

But I can give some examples of when I started beaming at my laptop *cough*

>>“Marco…”
“Polo”
Ah, turn left. About 33°.<<
-> So funny! |D

>>Their kissing has improved as well. First, both acted in a very clumsy way and once Inui nearly knocked out one of Kaidoh’s front teeth because he couldn’t hold himself back.<<
-> That is so cute... the whole paragraph about the kissing and then Inui's exercises to improve their breathing technique... That is so much like him xD

>>“Shut up...”
“Make me.”<<
-> *purr*

>>“98, 3%…”
(...)
“99, 7%…”<<
-> I really really laughed about this :D Again: that is so much like Inui and in a moment like this... i wonder whether he's doing this every time :D

>>“You probably shouldn’t call me that anymore...”
“Why not?”
“Right now I don’t think there’s anything else I can teach you…”<<
-> *-* no comment *-*

I can't say anything about the wirting style because it's still difficult for me to find characterictic elements, but I guess you'll be ok with it ^-^

byebye *wave*

I'm the kind of person who reads smut like this....
And I have to say it killed me...
My brain can't cope with this goddamn HOTNESS X//x
So I'm not so sure whether heart failure, exsanguination or drowning (in my own drivel..) is the cause of death...
most propably everything together..
I totally adore your writing style ♥

This FF is incredible, I'm very impressed!^^
i like yaoi in common, but your way to describe the situation and the protagonist's feelings and thoughts makes me happy!
i laughed and nearly cried because it's just so romantic aund cuuuuute!!!! X3
to read this story was not just fun, it filled my day with sense!
and i read is several times...many parts of it more than one time per session (or how you would call ist)...
did you write it because you want me to join the world of TeniPuri-Lovers? XD
If that's your way to motivate people, you will have a great carreer in marketing XDD
...what did i want to say?
why did i commend so late?
because my old comment is lost somewhere in the 300GB of my extern volume...<.<
*drop*
now that the introduction is over, i'll add my favorite sentences once again^^


“The humidity in this room is too high. My glasses are all fogged up.”

poor boy, welcome in the club...<.< (<---translated sentences sound so confusing...)

"It amazes him every time that kissing this particular area makes his boyfriend purr like a little kitten."

...I just can't imagine that sound! XD
by the way, is that the second part of your other FF?

“Marco…”
“Polo”
Ah, turn left. About 33°"

...I LOVE IT! XDD

“It’s just that you’re behaving a bit odd today... Not that I mind.”

i think, it's also because kaidoh knows that inui can't really see him! XD

“And it was worth the wait, believe me.”

*grabbs her tissues* how cuuuuuuuuuuuuute! T.T

"First, both acted in a very clumsy way and once Inui nearly knocked out one of Kaidoh’s front teeth because he couldn’t hold himself back."

...that's one way to loose your teeth that i would prefer in front of caries...<.<

“That’s a great compliment coming from someone who’s as blind as a mole.”

XDDDDD

“Let me show you some other way.”

....aaaaaaaaaaaaaaw!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!>.<
*jump*

"In some situations it actually turns him on a little."

...i knew it...<.<

“I think I’ve seen something like that on Discovery Channel last night…”

remembers me at the lyrics of this song of the bloodhound gang...<.<
but i guess it was more the pay-tv-channel, what he means...XDD

"He wonders for a second what his parents would say…"

...ohoh...<.<

“99, 7%…”

...i guess the list of things that he DOESN'T analyze is shorter...<.<

“Right now I don’t think there’s anything else I can teach you…”

muhahahaha! XD i believe you!!!

and now my comment to your comment!^^

1. you are queen of lemon!
2. in german it could just become even more perfect! (is there a possibilty for the increase of perfection? o.O)
3. i guess noone can write it like you did!
4. i hofe it won't be the last lemon-story ^.~
5. ...it would be strange if this comment was in german...<.<

WooooW! *______* I Like it...*speechless*
I'm so excited if you write something like that in the future! ^o^ I say: You can it! Do your best!

Greetings SabakunoYoru^^

*giggle*
what should i say?
i loved this to read ^.^
i liked it how you described their relationship.
i love this pair. xd
please write more of this pair and kind of ffs!

and thx for your comment by my ff!

lg, momo_eiji.

ps.: sorry for any grammar mistakes!^^°